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Comedy Fiction
 13 Jun 2008, 14:52 #35969 Reply To Post
Title : Feedback Ver2

Author : richard hurndall

Genre : Short Story, Comedy

Review Extract from Review By: akhanal

"Giraffe and the fridge

I wasn't sure what the story was about at the beginning. But as I read on the first few paragraphs, I was totally immersed in the story.

I have rated the story highly because I was completely absorbed in the story, and I didn't notice any distracting piece while I read the story.

I also respected the depth of knowledge of the writer, both in psychology and philosophy. Although it is intended to be a humor, I found it to be a serious but fun to read piece. I came out enlightened, and happy that I read the piece.

I, however, sensed the piece lacked concrete detail. Not that it mattered much while I was reading it, but it seemed to me that the story was mostly taking place in a white-coloured laboratory or something. The colors and the senses were missing. Maybe it is part of the story's craft, and looking at it from that perspective it works well."

Synopsis
A young doctor seeks feedback after a job interview, but finds that the recruitment process is more complicated than he bargained for. A grammar re-write after originally submitting the story here.

Enter any story title into the search function on the top right hand corner of the site to read the opening chapters.
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