Title : Dead Dom

Author : Daniel Lewis

Genre : Crime, Literary Fiction, Novel, General Fiction

Review Extract from Review By: panurge

Dead good!

Brilliant, polished work- I enjoyed reading this hugely and I'm very curious know where the story goes next.

I thought your handling of pace was excellent. The story moves at just the right rate, never jumping ahead too quickly, and never slowing down for too long. All the exposition is done naturally through dialogue and plot, just as it should be, and the flashbacks work beautifully. The whole thing feels very smooth and my interest didn't flag for a second.

The characters are very well observed and credible. I had a strong sense of each character's identity, particularly Dom and the narrator. Their dialogue is also spot-on. It's not easy to replicate that sort of very raw, natural dialogue without making the speakers sound like caricatures, but you manage it admirably here.

In my opinion, your descriptions of tension and violence work especially well. I noticed that your prose is generally low on visual and tactile description, but you ramp it up during these segments, which I think is the right choice. It gives a good sense of the sort of adrenalin rush the characters must experience. Really some great, visceral writing in these parts...

There were only two points in the story where, as a reader, it didn't quite ring true for me. The first was ...

Altogether, a fantastic piece of work. I genuinely loved it and I'll definitely read any further chapters you post here. I wish you great success for the future.

Synopsis
Gary knows it’s a sin to let Dom live. What he doesn’t know is that, as Dom ends, something more sinister begins...
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